Study Break.

by Ash on October 6, 2011

The flinch when ice-cold seat belt meets shoulder blade is quickly dismissed as his mouth finds hers. He tastes of Mountain Dew and Twizzlers and Polo and so much more than flavor of the month.

Muffled comments seep through vents. A random shout of “get a room” temporarily halts their exploration. Discovery resumes with grins and laughter, buttons and zippers. Roommates and secrecy means the darkest spot in the library parking lot and the backseat of a 1984 Oldsmobile must do.

Beads of sweat move along windows and skin. Groans escape from used springs and lips. Overloaded backpacks now ride shotgun with discarded t-shirts and jeans.

Wanting finally, blessedly, collides with taking.

Velour and metal absorb the impact far better than their world ever will.
 This week, I want you to take me there. Where is up to you: Someplace real? Imaginary? From your past? In your future? It can be fiction or creative non-fiction. But make your descriptions so rich that I can’t help but feel like I’m right there.

Close your eyes, paint the picture in your mind, and then use your words to paint it for me.

You have 200 words.

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{ 25 comments… read them below or add one }

Erin Brady October 6, 2011 at 9:08 pm

Welcome back, friend. I’ve missed your writing!

This is great. Takes me back to high school and that boy. (Wait…did I just say that??) Oh, I thought he was a MAN at the time but he was really just a boy. Isn’t it funny how life has a way of changing your perspective?

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CDG October 6, 2011 at 9:17 pm

Oh, I love when you turn up in my reader with hot, concise and eloquent lust.

I mean I always love when you turn up. But mmmm….

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Mad Woman behind the Blog October 7, 2011 at 2:25 am

This definitely changes the meaning of “doing the dew.”
Or, um, maybe this IS the definition.

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Victoria KP October 7, 2011 at 5:56 am

Excuse me, I have to go take a cold shower :-).

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Nancy C October 7, 2011 at 5:56 am

Damn, girl. This is fabulous.

The Mountain Dew and Polo. The sweat on the window.

And that incredible line about collision.

Just right. And I love that last line. I want to know why.

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Runnermom-jen October 7, 2011 at 7:25 am

I love the line “Mountain Dew and Twizzlers and Polo”…that brought me way back.

You did a wonderful job with this. You’re brave for sharing something so intimate with us…so thank you!

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Ash October 7, 2011 at 7:39 am

Thanks Jen! But totally fiction, I swear. Except the Oldsmobile part. Hubs did have one of those in college 😉

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angela October 7, 2011 at 8:24 am

Love! (and hi – it’s so great to see you)

Why the secrecy? I am intriuged by that…

You’ve captured the urgency of a car make-out perfectly.

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The Drama Mama October 7, 2011 at 9:29 am

And she’s back with a BANG!! Woot!!

Great job. I can see the windows fogging up.

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Kathleen Basi October 7, 2011 at 9:29 am

Wow. That was very evocative. Turns the heat up this morning. 🙂

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Shannon October 7, 2011 at 10:48 am

WHY must these be only 200 words?! You always leave me wanting more.

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Varda (SquashedMom) October 7, 2011 at 11:47 am

Awesome! (Fanning self, but somehow not getting any cooler.)

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Cheryl @ Mommypants October 7, 2011 at 12:10 pm

SO glad you’re back!

Very hot. And why did every guy bathe in polo?

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Kir October 7, 2011 at 12:21 pm

So glad to see you! Before I opened this I was thinking that I had really really wanted to write about my “first time” tis week and skip Kimmy and David…I’m so glad that you sort of wrote it for me. This was hot and so Romeo and Juliet …I loved it!

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The Lime October 7, 2011 at 2:38 pm

“…and so much more than the flavor of the month.” I don’t know if you meant the pop song reference, but I loved it anyway.

Also, thank you for having a title that didn’t give it away but made perfect sense. Seems like that can be a real challenge with this sort of writing and I found it really refreshing.

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Galit Breen October 7, 2011 at 2:53 pm

Eek! You’re here!

Also? Hawt.

XO

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Shell October 7, 2011 at 2:57 pm

Hot stuff, girl!

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Megan (Best of Fates) October 7, 2011 at 3:41 pm

I think *your* story is fabulous.

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Elaine October 7, 2011 at 5:13 pm

Damn, that was hot. Makes me want more. Of your writing, that is… 😉

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Renee October 7, 2011 at 6:18 pm

Wow!
This is awesome. The pace is perfect, impatience and lusty want.
Yeehaw!

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Debbie October 7, 2011 at 8:57 pm

I think I need a cigarette and cold shower! Well done! It took me back to…. oh, never mind 😉

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Skoteinia October 8, 2011 at 4:33 am

Left me breathless!

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MISH October 8, 2011 at 7:48 am

Transported me back in time … you really don’t want to know how far back … we’re talking decades here LOL !

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christina October 8, 2011 at 8:21 am

woooh. i enjoyed this. 🙂 good stuff.

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J October 10, 2011 at 3:00 pm

I believe the term is historical fiction. Or were the botanical gardens really that pretty at night? Hmmmmmm? Missed ya. Glad you are back.

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